Dear Greg,

I noticed your comment, and your concern and compared versions.

It seems to me that the Principles section of the 2^nd draft is appropriately captured in Recommendation #5 in the summary, as well as in annex 5. Some is also captured in the Human rights section of course.

Could you elaborate about the specific elements of the 2^nd report that you are missing ?

Best

Mathieu

De : accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org [mailto:accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org] De la part de Greg Shatan
Envoyé : lundi 23 novembre 2015 16:33
À : accountability-cross-community@icann.org
Objet : [CCWG-ACCT] What happened to the "Principles" section of the Second Draft?

In reviewing the Third Draft, the "Principles" section of the Second Draft seems to have disappeared entirely.  This section contained a number of important parts of our  proposal, and is an integral part of the overall proposal.

I anticipate a response that these recommendations have somehow been parceled out and absorbed into other sections of the Third Draft, but even a spot-check show that this is clearly not the case. 

It appears that our quest for readability has resulted in significant and difficult to find changes to the substance of our proposals.  This undermines the proposal as a whole and makes the job of reviewing this draft much harder.

I am deeply concerned.  

Greg