In the comments I submitted, I proposed a number of specific textual changes to address this.

I look forward to seeing the second draft. We are going to see a second draft, aren't we??? I hope.....

On Thursday, November 12, 2015, Niels ten Oever <lists@digitaldissidents.org> wrote:
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+1

Best,

Niels

On 11/10/2015 03:43 PM, Robin Gross wrote:
> I agree with Dr. Tropina on the incorrect HR language in the
> summary. It will lead to confusion that ICANN is signing up to
> adhere to some protocols and that has never been part of the plan
> of this group.  That confusion will cause much larger problems in
> the future.  Let's fix that language as she suggests.
>
> Thanks, Robin
>
> On Nov 10, 2015, at 5:54 AM, Dr. Tatiana Tropina wrote:
>
>> Hello I already made a comment on the chat during CCWG call
>> today, making it here again. I think the human rights language in
>> the summary is a bit confusing. "Reinforcing Adherence to Human
>> Rights Protocols" (pages 7, 8, 31) is not exactly what WP4
>> proposed. The word "protocols" makes no sense in this context, it
>> will be good either for diplomatic language or for IETF, but not
>> for the CCWG document. As far as I am concerned, we are not
>> suggesting to commit to any "protocols", furthermore, we even
>> decided not to suggest to mention any instruments. Even within
>> the context of international human rights law mentioning
>> "protocols" doesn't make any sense. I believe just "human rights"
>> or "internationally recognised human rights" would be much better
>> wording. But not "protocols" because it is confusing. Best
>> regards Tanya
>>
>> On 09/11/15 22:42, Bernard Turcotte wrote:
>>> All,
>>>
>>> Please find attached the first full draft of the executive
>>> summary which will be discussed on the call tomorrow.
>>>
>>> Apologies for the delay in getting this out but people have
>>> been working almost around the clock.
>>>
>>> Bernard Turcotte Staff Support
>>>
>>> for the co-chairs.
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