Thanks Jonathan.

I like this preample, but I'm a bit concerned with the way the listing at the end is presented, using "Projects should:".

I think it'd better to introduce the list with the first sentence only:

  "Therefore, the CCWG considers the following to be important guidelines to
  applicants seeking auction proceeds funding:"

Otherwise, one might (or should) think that all the listed criteria have to be fulfilled at once, which would reduce the scope to the most constraining one, i.e.

   "- Support ICANN's community activities and consensus-building processes"

Another option would be to include this ICANN specific criteria in the first one, e.g.
   "-   Be aligned +or in service+ of the ICANN's mission and core principles"

And keep the "Projects should:" as a AND constraint.




Edit: I think there's a typo:  “(concept).
probably should just be    concept.

On 2017-10-18 09:10, Jonathan Robinson wrote:

Thanks Marika,

All, please be aware of the following definition of an “open and
interoperable” internet as proposed by the informal drafting team.

_Note the following:_

_ _

_1.      __This is a draft, please consider whether or not it includes

all the key concepts required for a preamble? If not, what else is

missing? _

_2.      __Please bear in mind that the preamble is a place for key

concepts or overarching points rather than the fine detail of the bulk

of the proposal._

Thank-you,

Jonathan

On behalf of the drafting team

FROM: Marika Konings [mailto:marika.konings@icann.org]
SENT: Tuesday, October 17, 2017 8:57 PM
TO: ccwg-auctionproceeds@icann.org
SUBJECT: [Ccwg-auctionproceeds] Proposed Agenda - CCWG Auction

Proceeds Meeting on 19 October at 14.00 UTC

Dear All,

Please find below the proposed agenda for the next new gTLD Auction
Proceeds CCWG meeting which has been scheduled for Thursday 19 October
at 14.00 UTC. Call details have been distributed separately. If you
did not receive the call details and/or require a dial-out, please
contact gnso-secs@icann.org.

Best regards,

Marika

PROPOSED AGENDA – NEW GTLD AUCTION PROCEEDS CCWG MEETING – 19
OCTOBER 2017

        * Roll Call
        * Welcome
        * Review of open and interoperable Internet description (to be
distributed shortly)
        * Review of examples (see
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zQ66hCxrboAJPKeuU6nHwzHQwmU6g_3kS0JUSSC_tSk/edit)

        * Next steps in relation to charter question 7 ‘(‘Should ICANN

oversee the solicitation and evaluation of proposals, or delegate to
or coordinate with another entity, including, for example, a
foundation created for this purpose?’)

        * Planning for ICANN60
        * Confirm next steps and next meetings (Thursday 02 November 2017 -

8:45– 10:15 Working Group F2F Meeting in Hall B Section B/C and
13:30 – 15:00 Working Group F2F Meeting in Hall B Section B/C)

_MARIKA KONINGS_

_Vice President, Policy Development Support – GNSO, Internet
Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) _

_Email: marika.konings@icann.org  _

_ _

_Follow the GNSO via Twitter @ICANN_GNSO_

_Find out more about the GNSO by taking our interactive courses [1]
and visiting the GNSO Newcomer pages [2]. _



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