Hi Devan,

Thanks for this. I have only 2 comments:-

1. At page 4:
Justine Chew, ALAC Liaison, shared that she has no problems with Preamble 6 and suggested using the tree hyperlinks to show the three different versions of the motion document.

I know I said "Preamble 6" clause that's what I call it, but it now appears to me that, "Whereas Clause 6" would be a more recognizable phrase. Further, I believe some clarity would be useful in referring to "the motion document".

So, my proposed amendments would be:
Justine Chew, ALAC Liaison, shared that she has no problems with Preamble Whereas Clause 6 and suggested using the three hyperlinks in Whereas Clause 7, Whereas Clause 8 and Resolved Clause 1 in the motion to show reflect the three different versions of the Clarifying Statement, from draft, amended redline, to final, motion document in order to address.Jeffrey Neuman, GNSO Liaison to the GAC's point about needing to preserve the history of this topic.

2. At page 8
Susan Payne, IPC, explained that it might exclude willing participants to make participation in SubPro Working Group a requirement, and explained that it is a requirement to read all of the SubPro documentation including the Initial Report and Final Report. Susan Payne, IPC, also suggested inviting constituencies or stakeholder groups to suggest someone join the small team instead of their councilor.

I think the word "previous" is missing from the first line; perhaps it should be "....make previous participation in SubPro Working Group ...."? I will, however, happily defer to Susan on this.

Thanks,
Justine



On Thu, 31 Aug 2023 at 03:14, Devan Reed via council <council@gnso.icann.org> wrote:

Dear Councilors,

 

Attached, please find the draft minutes of the GNSO Council Meeting held on 24 August 2023.

 

If there are no comments, these minutes will be published on the website as approved, according to the GNSO Rules of Procedure  section  3.5  "If no objections are received within 10 days, the minutes will be deemed to have been approved for posting" on 09 September 2023

 

Thank you.

Kind Regards,

 

Devan

 

 

 

 

 

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