Hi Bart
This looks great, thank you.
I found a couple of minor things and will note them here as the word doc was only the report and nothing else.
Executive Summary
Need an extra line between paras 5 and 6
Under 4.3.2
Para 4, second sentence: limited mandate HAS made it ...
Para 7, need a period between ... IANA Functions Operator and The
Proposed Amended Charter
Scope of Responsibilities
Para 6, after Remedial Action Procedures please put (RAP).
And that’s all I have.
I would like to see the language for the posting page before it goes up if that’s possible.
Thanks again Bart
Donna
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Dear all,
Please find included the (draft) final version of the initial report. If no comments by Monday COB CET I will use this version for publication.
Unfortunately the PDF version does not show the deleted sections.
Finally I noticed that the following sentence was still included in the version Donna circulated under the review section:
The
CSC or
the IANA
Functions
Operator can
request
a review
or change
to service levels. Any
proposed
changes
to service
levels
as a
result of
the review
must be
agreed
to by the ccNSO
and
GNSO.
I deleted it as it superfluous given the new language under scope of responsibilities.
Kind regards,
Bart
<Initial Report CSC Charter Review Team.pdf>
<Initial Report CSC Charter Review Team.docx>