Good changes Julie.

 

Chuck

 

From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Julie Hammer
Sent: Tuesday, August 12, 2014 6:35 PM
To: Grace Abuhamad
Cc: CWG-DT-Stewardship@icann.org
Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] 6 hours left -- Final Edits due at 23:59 UTC on 12 August

 

Hi Grace and good morning everyone,

 

I've had a final look through the document and all the emails that have come in overnight.  I agree with the change of title proposed by Allan, I am happy with the revised wording covering consensus, and also happy with all the other proposed edits with a couple of small suggestions in the section titled 'Scope'.   

 

1.  The words that Grace captured in our teleconference regarding scope exclusions currently read:

 

For greater certainty, issues related to naming policy e.g. delegation, redelegation or revocation of ccTLDs, RAA related policy issues etc. are not within the scope of the CWG.

 

I find the phrase 'For greater certainty' a little awkward.  As this sentence follows another sentence about an exclusion, can I suggest we change this phrase to simply 'Additionally'?  This would then read:

 

The issue of who performs the Root Zone Maintainer (RZM) role is not in scope for the CWG and should be dealt with in a subsequent effort as needed. Additionally, issues related to naming policy e.g. delegation, redelegation or revocation of ccTLDs, RAA related policy issues etc. are not within the scope of the CWG.

 

2.  I also note that the second sentence under the heading 'Scope' states:

 

The Annex to this Charter contains a summary and description of the IANA functions drawn from the NTIA’s statement of work for that IANA contract. 

 

That Annex still needs to be added or the reference to it removed.

 

Cheers,  Julie

 

On 13 Aug 2014, at 4:00 am, Grace Abuhamad <grace.abuhamad@icann.org> wrote:

 

Hi all, 

 

Just a quick reminder that we are 6h away from our final edits deadline. 

 

From: Grace Abuhamad <grace.abuhamad@icann.org>
Date: Monday, August 11, 2014 9:59 PM
To: "CWG-DT-Stewardship@icann.org" <CWG-DT-Stewardship@icann.org>
Subject: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] Latest Draft Charter -- Final Edits due at 23:59 UTC on 12 August (in 22 hours!)

 

Hi all, 

 

Attached are two versions of the updated draft charter (redline and clean). 

 

I used Stephanie's "minor edits" document as the base for the rest of the proposed changes. I've outlined the changes I made for your reference:  

  • Section II: Included Julie's text (first sentence of "Goals & Objectives" section)
  • Section III: Deleted everything except for the first sentence in point 2 of the work plan, upon Chuck's suggestion.
  • Section IV: 
    • Included Stephanie's text. 
    • Completed text relating to staff assignment in "Staffing & Resources" (Grace/Staff). 
    • Included Allan's text on resourcing (can the DT confirm the placement of the text in the charter?). 

Note: I am missing text from Byron, but I left the text discussed on the call as a placeholder. 

 

Final edits are due at 23:59 UTC on 12 August (in 22 hours!). 

 

 

Please let me know if you would like to schedule a final call.   

- Grace

 

 

 

 

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