Brian, all, as a reminder, please provide any proposed changes / updates by entering the proposed language as well as reference (page number / line number) in the google doc table as soon as possible: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SoNTnvvadNQ8nX_-OxN4mtsd-gfLNxT54GXSXyGQwEQ/edit?ts=5bead3ba. The latest version of the Initial Report can be found here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1F_fQ5bEHAS543TdLOmDKxXpcJFF1qQy_/view.

 

Thanks,

 

Caitlin, Berry and Marika

 

From: Gnso-epdp-team <gnso-epdp-team-bounces@icann.org> on behalf of "King, Brian via Gnso-epdp-team" <gnso-epdp-team@icann.org>
Reply-To: "King, Brian" <Brian.King@markmonitor.com>
Date: Wednesday, November 14, 2018 at 6:15 PM
To: Amr Elsadr <aelsadr@icannpolicy.ninja>, "gnso-epdp-team@icann.org" <gnso-epdp-team@icann.org>
Subject: Re: [Gnso-epdp-team] Updated data redaction language

 

Hi all,

 

We echo Amr’s point about the arguments appearing only in a footnote.

 

The initial report needs to be updated in a few respects:

  1. The report should not relegate any group’s position to a footnote, which it currently does in a number of places.
  2. The report should not present a position as a team recommendation when there are opposing or divergent positions, which it also currently does in a number of places.
  3. The report should be careful to phrase the questions objectively, and not leading toward a particular answer or viewpoint.

 

Thank you.

 

Brian J. King

Director of Internet Policy & Industry Affairs

MarkMonitor / Part of Clarivate Analytics

Phone: +1 (443) 761-3726

brian.king@markmonitor.com

 

From: Gnso-epdp-team <gnso-epdp-team-bounces@icann.org> On Behalf Of Amr Elsadr
Sent: Wednesday, November 14, 2018 3:56 PM
To: gnso-epdp-team@icann.org
Subject: Re: [Gnso-epdp-team] Updated data redaction language

 

Hi again,

 

I now see where the NCSG views expressed in the 10 November email are located in the document (third bullet on first page). It seems I need to offer apologies for the second time this evening, this time for an oversight/not reading the document carefully enough. Thanks to Marika for pointing out to me where the relevant text is located.

 

I am, however, still concerned that the rationale supporting the arguments in favor of redacting the Organization field are included only as a footnote. Recital 26 might be alright, as it is a fairly specific reference, although I’m not confident that readers of the report will actually look it up. The section from the WSGR memo, on the other hand, is not so straight forward at all. I doubt that readers of the initial report will easily locate the relevant section of the report that addresses this issue. It might be a better idea to include the relevant language in the body of the report, as well as a link to the memo itself.

 

Apologies once again, and thanks.

 

Amr




On Nov 14, 2018, at 10:34 PM, Amr Elsadr <aelsadr@icannpolicy.ninja> wrote:

 

Hi,

 

I don’t understand how we ended up with this document. The NCSG already provided comments/rationale on why we don’t support not redacting the Organization field on 10 November via email, which I understand is supported by the ISPCP, the RySG and the RrSG. This same rationale was discussed during the last F2F meeting in Barcelona. I don’t, however, see any of it included in the 14 November document.

 

Am I missing something?

 

Thanks.

 

Amr




On Nov 14, 2018, at 10:10 PM, Matt Serlin <matt@brandsight.com> wrote:

 

Hi Marika,

 

Thanks for sending the updated language…it will be added to the pile ☺

 

One note though I immediately saw, can you please add the RrSG to the following text:

 

“As such, the NCSG, ISPCP and RySG do not support not redacting this information.”

 

Regards,

Matt 

 

From: Gnso-epdp-team <gnso-epdp-team-bounces@icann.org> on behalf of Marika Konings <marika.konings@icann.org>
Date: Wednesday, November 14, 2018 at 12:53 PM
To: "gnso-epdp-team@icann.org" <gnso-epdp-team@icann.org>
Subject: [Gnso-epdp-team] Updated data redaction language

 

Dear All,

 

Following yesterday’s discussion, please find attached the updated proposed language for inclusion in the Initial Report in relation to data redaction. Note that this version includes input from Margie and Benedict in relation to the action item from yesterday’s EPDP Team meeting (“Margie to provide language that describes the organizations supporting not redacting the “organization” field. Benedict to provide language to explain systemic risk of not publishing organization field.”). If you have any further comments and/or proposed edits, please share these with the list as soon as possible.

 

Best regards,

 

Caitlin, Berry and Marika

 

Marika Konings

Vice President, Policy Development Support – GNSO, Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) 

 

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