Thanks for this, much improved. I offer a couple of suggested edits. Given that ICANN will be defining the public interest next year, or trying, I would suggest you accept the tempered language on that item. We are not there yet.
Stephanie Perrin

On 2015-10-04 18:32, Mary Wong wrote:

Dear WG members,

The proposed agenda for the next WG call, scheduled for Tuesday 6 October, is as follows:

Roll call/updates to SOI

Update on planning for Dublin face-to-face WG meeting

Review and discussion of Sub Team 4 report (attached)

[If time permits] Review and discussion of updated Illustrative Disclosure Framework from Sub Team 3 (attached)

Next steps

Please note that while the documents for agenda items #3 and #4 have been worked on by a number of members from each Sub Team, the versions being circulated have not yet been fully reviewed by all members of the respective Sub Teams. Other than the addition of page numbers to facilitate WG discussion, staff has made no changes to the two documents as received.

Please also find attached proposed revised language for Section 1.3.3 of the WG report, which concerns the question of online financial transactions and was initially the subject of work by Sub Team 2. This revised version is an update from the document first circulated on behalf of the WG co-chairs on 18 September, and represents the co-chairs’ suggested update based on the WG discussion of 22 September.

Thanks and cheers

Mary

Mary Wong

Senior Policy Director

Internet Corporation for Assigned Names & Numbers (ICANN)

Telephone: +1 603 574 4889

Email: mary.wong@icann.org
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