Hi Wes,
Thanks for your suggestions.  I am unsure which version of the brochure you looked at but some of the earlier versions were full of typos and sentences that were not correct.  Myself and others have corrected all the typos.  The third version sent out has all the corrections.  Glenn was looking for some early feedback on the brochure before we sent it to comms.  

The main problem Glenn was dealing with was that he was using a template that was made for another ralo and that is why the colors were off. Also that is why some corrections could not be made but noted. The latest version is up on the website. Glenn mentioned this in his note,but perhaps you missed it.

Best,
Judith

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On Sep 12, 2016, at 2:58 AM, Wes Boudville <wesboudville@gmail.com> wrote:

​The writing of an explicit www is bad practice. It is inconsistent with the multiple other links in the document that discard the www.

But more than that - the document was sloppily written. I pointed out several outright typos. No one else amongst the recipients apparently scrutinised the document. The typos were straightforward to detect. 

wes

On Sun, Sep 11, 2016 at 8:08 PM, Internet Society - NY Chapter <admin@isoc-ny.org> wrote:

On Wed, Sep 7, 2016 at 1:39 PM, Eduardo Diaz <eduardodiazrivera@gmail.com> wrote:
I believe the NARALO color is yellow - why red?

​I don't have a problem with this. Looks good.

I also don't have a problem with formal full url on the front page, it shows we are old school.

j




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