NOT PROTECTIVELY MARKED All, A late arrival from Canada - I can't find the tracked changes - does anyone know what this means? These suggested corrections are reflected in the Word Tracking feature under the #000035590 code. The Comments are identified more clearly (under Fred and my name). In fact, I can't even open the document, computer says 'No'. The only other point they make is that the document is too long. Sharon Sharon LEMON OBE Deputy Director Cyber and Forensics Serious and Organised Crime Agency (SOCA) 07768 290902 0207 855 2800 Hello Shona/Gary, Further to your earlier message please be advised that Lieutenant Frédérick (Fred) Gaudreau, Sûreté du Québec, and I have reviewed the WHOIS Policy RT - Draft document and have identified suggested corrections/comments that we would respectfully submit for your consideration. These suggested corrections are reflected in the Word Tracking feature under the #000035590 code. The Comments are identified more clearly (under Fred and my name). Please note that we did not have sufficient time to review the Appendices document. We recognize the importance of this document and fully appreciate everyone's efforts in putting this together. However we would humbly submit that perhaps the document would have more impact if it were strategically focused to within a 15-20 page document. The Appendices document would also need to be downsized but it could include additional information currently in the main draft Policy document. We feel this would ensure to highlight the main issues and this would in turn ensure to provide the reader with all the relevant information surrounding the WHOIS issue. Please feel free to contact us if you have any questions. Marc S/Sgt Marc Moreau, s-é-m Royal Canadian Mounted Police/Gendarmerie royale du Canada Strategic Communications and Liaison Officer, Technological Crime Branch, Spécialiste en Communication et Agent de liaison, Sous-direction de la criminalité technologique, 1426 St. Joseph Blvd., Rm 2200 Ottawa, Ontario K1A 0R2 Ph. (613) 993-6011 Fax (613) 993-2963>>> "McINTOSH, Shona" <shona.mcintosh@soca.x.gsi.gov.uk> 11/25/2011 8:59 AM >>> NOT PROTECTIVELY MARKED Dear All Please see attached; the latest version of the Whois Review Team Report. Please can you have a read, and make any comments you feel necessary. Instructions for comment: Rather than track changes, can any changes please be inserted directly into the text, highlighted in yellow and your initials added at the end? The deadline for this back to me / Gary is GMT 1200 on 29th November. Apologies for the tight timescale. Shona McIntosh l Staff Officer to Sharon Lemon | Serious Organised Crime Agency l +44(0)20 78552941 07717347907 | shona.mcintosh@soca.x.gsi.gov.uk This information is supplied in confidence by SOCA, and is exempt from disclosure under the Freedom of Information Act 2000. It may also be subject to exemption under other UK legislation. Onward disclosure may be unlawful, for example, under the Data Protection Act 1998. Requests for disclosure to the public must be referred to the SOCA FOI single point of contact, by email on PICUEnquiries@soca.x.gsi.gov.uk or by telephoning 0870 268 8677. All E-Mail sent and received by SOCA is scanned and subject to assessment. Messages sent or received by SOCA staff are not private and may be the subject of lawful business monitoring. E-Mail may be passed at any time and without notice to an appropriate branch within SOCA, on authority from the Director General or his Deputy for analysis. This E-Mail and any files transmitted with it are intended solely for the individual or entity to whom they are addressed. If you have received this message in error, please contact the sender as soon as possible. The original of this email was scanned for viruses by the Government Secure Intranet virus scanning service supplied by Cable&Wireless Worldwide in partnership with MessageLabs. (CCTM Certificate Number 2009/09/0052.) On leaving the GSi this email was certified virus free. Communications via the GSi may be automatically logged, monitored and/or recorded for legal purposes. This email was received from the INTERNET and scanned by the Government Secure Intranet anti-virus service supplied by Cable&Wireless Worldwide in partnership with MessageLabs. (CCTM Certificate Number 2009/09/0052.) In case of problems, please call your organisation's IT Helpdesk. Communications via the GSi may be automatically logged, monitored and/or recorded for legal purposes. The original of this email was scanned for viruses by the Government Secure Intranet virus scanning service supplied by Cable&Wireless Worldwide in partnership with MessageLabs. (CCTM Certificate Number 2009/09/0052.) On leaving the GSi this email was certified virus free. Communications via the GSi may be automatically logged, monitored and/or recorded for legal purposes.