Hi all,

 

The updated clean PDF is attached, which incorporates the comments to date from Heather, Kerry-Ann, and Russ. If there are no other comments over the weekend this version will go to the Board on Monday.

 

Have a great weekend everyone.

 

Best,
Jennifer

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Email: jennifer.bryce@icann.org

 

 

From: Heather Flanagan <hlf@sphericalcowconsulting.com>
Date: Friday, 22 January 2021 at 12:09
To: Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org>, Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>, "Barrett, Kerry-Ann" <KABarrett@oas.org>
Cc: ICANN SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org>
Subject: RE: [Ssr2-review] [Ext] Re: For Review: SSR2 Final Report

 

HI Kerry-Ann,

Thank you for the thorough review! I agree that I somehow missed the legacy language in 8, 10, and 13. I do think that the extended context around that language in 9 and 15 suggests they should be left as they are.

 

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On Jan 22, 2021, 8:27 AM -0800, Barrett, Kerry-Ann <KABarrett@oas.org>, wrote:

Dear Jen

 

Copied in Heather just to check on something. Recs. 8.1, 9, 10, 13 and 15 – still have the legacy language similar to ‘This recommendation requires action from ICANN Board and ICANN Org.’

 

Aside from those we can do a last scan but I picked up on those.

 

Thanks

 

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From: Ssr2-review [mailto:ssr2-review-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Jennifer Bryce
Sent: Wednesday, January 20, 2021 6:10 PM
To: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>
Cc: ICANN SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org>
Subject: Re: [Ssr2-review] [Ext] Re: For Review: SSR2 Final Report

 

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Hi Russ,

 

Thanks for the review and revised wording. I’ll incorporate this adjustment unless other RT members comment. Regarding your questions:

 

1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? – Comms pointed me to this page, which is the usage they are following: https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-04-02-en [icann.org]

 

2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? See p19 for how it looks in PDF format.  

 

Best,

Jennifer

 

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Email: jennifer.bryce@icann.org

 

 

From: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>
Date: Wednesday, 20 January 2021 at 12:27
To: Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org>
Cc: ICANN SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org>
Subject: [Ext] Re: [Ssr2-review] For Review: SSR2 Final Report

 

I reviewed the redlines.  Something is wrong with the wording starting on page 52 for two or three pages.  In the attachment, I offer corrections.

 

I also have two questions:

 

1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym?

 

2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width?

 

Russ

 

 

 

On Jan 20, 2021, at 2:46 PM, Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org> wrote:

 

Dear SSR2 Review Team members,

 

For your review by 17:00 UTC on Friday 22 January:

 

Attached, please find the final report in the template. This version incorporates edits from the comms proofing. You can see the changes in the redline version attached. Please let me know if you see anything that hasn’t translated to the template properly, or anything amiss in the proofing. 

 

After the Friday deadline I will work with Russ to get the report submitted to the Board. Thanks in advance for taking the time to review this final, proofed version.

 

FYI – the final report will be translated into the 5 UN languages. I’ll share these with the team once they are available.

 

Best,

Jennifer

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Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability

Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)