Thank you, Mr. Arasteh and Matthew for the comments.

I have made some changes to the document based on Matthew's comment and have accepted the useful changes Mr. Arasteh added to the document. I have tried to polish the document so had to make some minor changes and strike out one of the sentences that was changed. I hope that is ok. This document will be sent to the CCWG today.

Best

Farzaneh

On 21 October 2016 at 21:51, Kavouss Arasteh <kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com> wrote:

Dear All,
Pls find attached my comment in redlines
Regards
Arasteh
2016-10-21 17:25 GMT+02:00 matthew shears <mshears@cdt.org>:
Hi

In (1) I would bullet the tracks and use the actual track descriptions from WS2 just for clarity's sake.

Matthew

On 21/10/2016 15:56, farzaneh badii wrote:
Dear all,

Please find attached the preliminary progress report of the WS 2 group on SO/AC Accountability. Please send your comments, edits and responses within 48 hours as we need to finalize the report by Monday 24th October the latest.

As a supplemental report, we might attach our work in progress document available here : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WTRZZJ9B3Q6BHP6AlDHmoiep8NeshNpomBNM4bBXYpA/edit

Best regards,

Cheryl, Farzi, Steve

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