You were heard before, but I was really at a loss to know how to reduce the size that much and still make the arguments that I (and others) believe are needed to counter the negative perceptions that could lead to rejection. And give that the document must be submitted within a few hours, there is really no way for someone else to take over the task and get ALAC buy-in on the result. Alan At 30/04/2016 05:02 AM, Maureen Hilyard wrote:
Hi all
I've said it before but not with such specificity. My recommendations:
1. Incorporate the key ideas in the "Proposal" section into the Executive Summary
2. Merge the "Background" and the "importance of Face to Face" meetings into a couple of paragraphs
3. Shorten the bullet pointed items in the "MultiYear Planning section" to key ideas only, present them after a short introduction
4. End with the conclusion and next steps, as is :)
3 pages MAX. (plus your graphic and annexes). At the moment we are competing with the bylaws for quantity.
Maureen
On Fri, Apr 29, 2016 at 6:46 PM, Alan Greenberg <<mailto:alan.greenberg@mcgill.ca>alan.greenberg@mcgill.ca> wrote: Attached please fine the final proposal, subject to final clean-up editing (and inclusion of the missing URL on the last page).
Please forward any critical errors to me and Heidi.
Note that this paper must be submitted to the Budget Public Comment prior to 23:59 UTC on Saturday, 30 April.
Alan
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