Dear Bart, all Apologies for the late reaction. The content of the submission looks good, but I have some concerns on the exact wording 1) 1st paragraph- It looks like a word is missing: “… improve the PTI-related planning processes with the overall ICANN planning process” To improve ??? (alignment? Correlation?) 2) 2nd paragraph: “ … then provide comments in the order of the proposed Bylaw changes.” Actually there are no comments on each of suggested change. Just one Paragraph regarding all the changes 3) In general observations: “ Therefore the ccNSO Council would strongly support assurances and explicit confirmation by PTI that the safeguards on the separation of ICANN and PTI and ICANN’s obligation to fund the IANA functions are maintained as basic principles and not affected by the proposed Bylaw changes.” In section On the proposed Bylaw changes “The changes appear to maintain the principles identified above, that the IANA resources required will definitely be provided by ICANN through its budgeting process. Sounds like we ask to confirm that “IANA comes first” principle is maintained , but then ourselves confirm that it is maintained. Looks slightly controversial to me Irina From: Ccnso-council <ccnso-council-bounces@icann.org> On Behalf Of Bart Boswinkel via Ccnso-council Sent: Monday, July 3, 2023 11:53 AM To: Alejandra Reynoso Barral <alejandra.reynoso@gmail.com>; ccNSO Council <ccnso-council@icann.org> Subject: Re: [ccnso-council] [ACTION REQUIRED] Draft comment on PTI / IANA Governance Proposal Dear all, Please find included the final draft as Alejandra mentioned in her earlier email (see also the link to the Google doc below). The Public forum closes on 5 July. If there are any issues with the proposed text, please use the list closing date 4 July 17.00 UTC Thank you and kind regards, Bart From: Ccnso-council <ccnso-council-bounces@icann.org <mailto:ccnso-council-bounces@icann.org> > on behalf of Alejandra Reynoso Barral via Ccnso-council <ccnso-council@icann.org <mailto:ccnso-council@icann.org> > Reply to: Alejandra Reynoso Barral <alejandra.reynoso@gmail.com <mailto:alejandra.reynoso@gmail.com> > Date: Tuesday, 27 June 2023 at 12:59 To: ccNSO Council <ccnso-council@icann.org <mailto:ccnso-council@icann.org> > Subject: [ccnso-council] [ACTION REQUIRED] Draft comment on PTI / IANA Governance Proposal Dear Councillors As Bart mentioned yesterday, here is the draft on the ccNSO Council input with respect to PTI Bylaw change <https://www.icann.org/en/public-comment/proceeding/pti-iana-governance-propo...> : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fl8BOLJcVb99gpLbles8BtUD2VeYWZaf/edit [docs.google.com] <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https:/docs.google.com/document/d/1fl8BOLJcVb99g...> Please by the end of this week add any comments or edits that you see necessary, especially Irina and Jordan who brought great observations on this topic. The deadline for submissions is the 5th of July, so we need to have a final draft on Monday 3/Jul. Best regards, Alejandra ******************************************* Work like you don't need the money. Love like you've never been hurt. Dance like nobody's watching. Sing like nobody's listening. And live like it's Heaven on Earth. *******************************************