Thanks Elaine I’ll make the changes and resend the deck. From: Elaine Pruis [mailto:elainepruis@gmail.com] Sent: Sunday, October 29, 2017 9:55 AM To: Austin, Donna <Donna.Austin@team.neustar> Cc: csc-review@icann.org; hm.boyle@icloud.com Subject: [EXTERNAL] Re: [CSC-Review] Updated deck HI Donna Just a few suggestions : Missing the word "are" here on page 4: "Any issues identified during this review that (are) out of scope, but relevant for the proper functioning of the CSC will be captured" Regarding the SLE change text, maybe just add "to be referenced in the charter" so that it is clear that the charter would be modified to encompass the new procedure: "The Charter makes provision for the CSC or PTI to request a review or change to service level targets. In addition, any change to an SLE would also require a change to the IANA Naming Function Contract to be agreed by PTI and ICANN. The CSC has developed a SLE change procedure (to be referenced in the charter) for consideration as part of this review." Or just mention it if that is too wordy. Elaine On Fri, Oct 27, 2017 at 9:46 PM, Austin, Donna via CSC-Review <csc-review@icann.org<mailto:csc-review@icann.org>> wrote: H all I’ve made some changes to the PPT sent around by Ria. I propose that we delete slide 8 and just have an opportunity for open questions rather than pointed ones. We can discuss tomorrow morning. Thanks Donna _______________________________________________ CSC-Review mailing list CSC-Review@icann.org<mailto:CSC-Review@icann.org> https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/csc-review<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__mm.icann.org_mailman_listinfo_csc-2Dreview&d=DwMFaQ&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=CwipU91YB6EkpFXK9ynnT_QUef4yC5p7jpsDm8cU97g&m=rGEltuQO2uFat-eKt-hGMlyEQgLLenODQ0Y3QLWs2ho&s=7lnqpvlyifkeExgiUM0VcMSJLkJRO2ufsdTqX5mXvzs&e=>