I added some responses to Avri's comments as well as some new edits for consideration and a few new personal comments that are all highlighted in the attached redline version. I also identified sections and/or comments that I think need discussion by the full drafting by using green font. Essentially that means that all comments need to be discussed along with the associated charter text. I encourage others to do the same for other sections of the draft charter that they think the full DT should discuss and insert a comment for each one. Chuck -----Original Message----- From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Avri Doria Sent: Sunday, July 27, 2014 4:54 AM To: cwg-dt-stewardship@icann.org Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting Hi, Some additional edits and suggestions based on discussion in the NCSG. avri On 26-Jul-14 01:25, Grace Abuhamad wrote:
Hi all,
Attached are two latest versions of the charter. I removed Allan's notes as he requested. One version has redlined changes, the other is clean with just comments.
Talk to you all on Monday, Grace
On 7/24/14 3:49 PM, "Allan MacGillivray" <allan.macgillivray@cira.ca> wrote:
At the IETF BoF meeting this morning in Toronto, the IETF agreed to establish a working group on IANA transition. Alissa Cooper made a presentation (available at http://www.ietf.org/proceedings/90/slides/slides-90-ianaplan-1.pptx ) which contains (page 11) a revised timeline for the ICG's work. While it remains even 'draftier' than their charter, it nevertheless reflects some discussion that the ICG has apparently had since their meeting last week. You will note that in this timeline, they are no longer seeking a submission from each community by the end of the year, but rather by Feb. 2, just before ICANN Marrakech. But the end date has been moved to June to reflect the likelihood that the NTIA will have to run its own domestic consultation process, which would likely include some form of US Congressional scrutiny.
Marika - could I ask you to remove the notes from me in the next version of the draft charter?
Thanks
Allan
-----Original Message----- From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Marika Konings Sent: July-24-14 6:47 AM To: Avri Doria; cwg-dt-stewardship@icann.org Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting
As the document still came up with the Academy WG name, I've taken the liberty to re-save the document under its original title, removed the comments that Chuck said could be removed and deleted the sentence 'and sub-working groups' to avoid any confusion over whether additional members would need to be appointed to sub-working groups. Please use this version to make any further comments / edits.
Best regards,
Marika
On 22/07/14 16:41, "Avri Doria" <avri@acm.org> wrote:
On 22-Jul-14 09:40, Gomes, Chuck wrote:
Avri - Your name for the file indicates that you may have been working on the Academy WG around the same time. :)
actually just fumble fingering where i do a 'save as' and accidentally press the wrong name. the academy Wg file is from 2012.
i have attached a copy with the correct file name, just for filing sake.
thanks for noticing.
avri
All good contributions Avri.
thanks
I really like Avri's suggestion on the linkage between the Accountability effort and the IANA transition; see comment Ad10R9 on page 3.
I think she raises a very important question in comment Ad18R17 on page 4 :" Why would subgroups have different membership?"
I definitely think "we should avoid voting" as she says in comment Ad26R25 on page 5.
On a different note, I suggest deleting the following comments from me: CG1 and CG16.
Chuck
Avri - Your name for the file indicates that you may have been working on the Academy WG around the same time. :)
-----Original Message----- From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Avri Doria Sent: Monday, July 21, 2014 11:28 PM To: cwg-dt-stewardship@icann.org Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting
Hi,
I have added a few more comments.
avri
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