What Steve suggests about ending the sentence after ‘proposed Petition’ makes sense to me. David David McAuley Sr International Policy & Business Development Manager Verisign Inc. 703-948-4154 From: Gnso-bylaws-dt <gnso-bylaws-dt-bounces@icann.org> On Behalf Of Steve DelBianco Sent: Monday, October 14, 2019 1:55 PM To: Heather Forrest <haforrestesq@gmail.com>; Ariel Liang <ariel.liang@icann.org>; Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@icann.org>; gnso-bylaws-dt@icann.org Subject: [EXTERNAL] [Gnso-bylaws-dt] URGENT NEXT STEPS to finalising our work Mine was Section 3.3 guideline on removing ALL directors ( https://drive.google.com/open?id=1fSv0ELSGLmaABoz2_DKXHRsHrG-MyihPR1ePpbmamD... ) I found two substantive concerns, which isn’t surprising since we just completed the drafting on this section. On page 7 and on page 11 we say: “…the GNSO Council will be deemed to have rejected the proposed Petition and the matter will be considered closed.” I am not sure the petition matter is closed if every other Decisional Participant supports removal. Perhaps we drop everything after "proposed Petition" in this sentence. I found a few typos/repeated phrases, and noted those in comments. We have reached the end of our work plan! There are 2 things immediately left to do (we'll circle back to clean up the last item, the Joint Consultation Guidelines with ccNSO, once our looming deadline to Council is met). To meet Council's document deadline, both tasks must be done before Monday, 14 October: FIRST: FINALIZE 3.1, 3.2 and 3.3 - TO COMPLETE BY THIS SUNDAY, 6 OCTOBER in your time zone: Ariel has worked diligently to clean up these documents following our call, and I have reviewed her edits and tinkered a bit further. Please can all DT members review these, with particular attention to: • 3.2 - the revisions to 4.2.3 (SO/AC Director Removal Petition Review and Certification of Completeness): Ariel has tidied up, and you will see I have also further added the words 'Certification of Completeness' in the heading of this section and some plain-English introductory words in the introduction at the bottom of page 1 to more clearly distinguish between Certification of Completeness by Council leadership; Acceptance of the Petition by Vote of Relevant House; and Approval of Petition by entire Council. The same language has been ported to 2.2/2.3, 3.1, and 3.3 as well. • 3.3 - the revisions to 4.2.4 (GNSO Community Feedback on Certified Board Recall Petition) to address David's comment to specify the help from staff to compile, and if time permits, summarise, any comments received through Community Feedback. The same language has been ported to other relevant sections in 1.3/1.4, 2.2/2.3, 3.1, 3.2, and 3.3 (as noted in Ariel’s response to David). SECOND: REVIEW OF FULL PACKAGE - TO COMPLETE BY NEXT FRIDAY, 11 OCTOBER in your time zone: Ariel has added a table at the top of our work plan to set out each Guideline/Template we have developed. WORKPLAN found here (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yeydtqli8UWOrrvChIf9EMprGxo0pOr5lcadM-n0...). I have randomly nominated an active DT member to each Guideline. If you are completely dissatisfied with your allocated document, please convince another DT member to swap with you (bear with me please, as we don't have too much time to rock-paper-scissors over who gets what). I'm happy to take on 2 reviews to complete the list unless a DT member who was not allocated a doc wants to take on a review. Starting from next Monday morning, 7 October (please wait until Monday morning so Julie, Ariel and I can ensure that 3.1, 3.2 and 3.3 are ready and port any relevant changes across to the other docs) please review your allocated document next week. When your review is complete, indicate so in the workplan table by typing 'yes' or 'complete' into the relevant box in the chart. Ariel has diligently ported backwards to earlier documents our learnings and decisions from the more recent documents, but we're all more experienced now, and this final review may catch further things we didn't think about earlier in the year. If you find any issues of concern in your review, please raise them ASAP on the DT list, making very clear which document you're referring to and what the problem is. Very best wishes to all, Heather