Thank you Kavouss. As requested, I have made specific drafting suggestions on the latest draft in drop box (although there was also a suggestion from Joe in a separate drafting thread where I have a slightly different line from him). I have left the comments in place as I think it is important that colleagues understand why I have concerns. I have not tried to change the filename: as Alissa pointed out in her mail, this should wait for a new clean draft to avoid causing confusion. Cheers Martin From: Kavouss Arasteh [mailto:kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com] Sent: 11 September 2014 21:34 To: Martin Boyle Cc: Alissa Cooper; Coordination Group Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Consensus building discussion Martin I agree with most of the things that you said. However, it might be useful that you suggest a revision marked text and move all of your comments to the covering. It seems that at least I have sympathy for many of your thoughts but prefer to see your text possibly not coming back to square one. No one believes that anyone else should be excluded. A team work means everybody should be given the opportunity to comment. What bothers me is that some people want to restrict the process to only three operational communities .While we agree that their interest should be met but we want to give opportunity to others I am happy that you also agree to maintain the case by case approach. Waiting your editorial and other sort of amendment in a revision mark approach not introducing square bracket and comments in the margin SUGGEST CONCRETE AMENDMENTS and give the name to the file as you wish However, I wish to reiterate that I would have serious difficulties if one focus on a particular case or particular community or the language and approach used by a particular community We need to be general and cover every body's case Regards Kavouss