Dear Milton, Thank you very much for your kind response .You are among the most knowledgeable and competent as far as I understand the exchange of message. Pls kindly note that the term LIGHT before coordination, weakenes our actions .It could be interpreted that the coordination actions that we undertake is not sufficiently serious as it is qualified by the adjective LIGHT. Would it cause any difficulty that we delete that and just refer to coordination without any qualification. Regards Kavouss 2014-08-29 15:54 GMT+02:00 Milton L Mueller <mueller@syr.edu>:
My opinions regarding Kavouss’s proposed changes:
Would prefer to keep “light” in there.
OK to remove the word “only” from the paragraph on Comments
OK to replace “direct” with “forward”
OK to replace “encourages” with “urges”
Milton L Mueller
Laura J and L. Douglas Meredith Professor
Syracuse University School of Information Studies
http://faculty.ischool.syr.edu/mueller/
*From:* internal-cg-bounces@icann.org [mailto: internal-cg-bounces@icann.org] *On Behalf Of *Martin Boyle *Sent:* Friday, August 29, 2014 8:46 AM *To:* Kavouss Arasteh; Daniel Karrenberg
*Cc:* Coordination Group *Subject:* Re: [Internal-cg] RFP - publishable draft?
Thanks Alissa for your work on this. I’m sure we could continue word-smithing this for a long time, and I’m happy to go.
Kavouss’s comment on light: I like the term as it reminds everyone that we are not planning to play the autocrats. But if non-native English speakers find the meaning obscure I’m ok without.
Cheers
Martin
*From:* internal-cg-bounces@icann.org [ mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org <internal-cg-bounces@icann.org>] *On Behalf Of *Kavouss Arasteh *Sent:* 29 August 2014 13:32 *To:* Daniel Karrenberg *Cc:* Coordination Group *Subject:* Re: [Internal-cg] RFP - publishable draft?
Dear Alissa,
Dear All,
I suggest some small amendments to make various parts of the text consistent with each other
See attachment
Kavouss the l
2014-08-29 13:37 GMT+02:00 Daniel Karrenberg <daniel.karrenberg@ripe.net>:
On 28.08.14 23:36 , Alissa Cooper wrote:
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Are there any objections to publishing this as a draft (and having the secretariat host it on our web site and make an announcement about its existence) by Sept 1?
I support publishing this as a daft with Elise's corrections.
Daniel
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