Dear Review Team Members, Following up on Emily's note, this is to inform you that Emily's revised version of the consolidated draft report is now available on the private wiki. Please go to: https://community.icann.org/display/whoisreviewprivate/Draft+report and refer to V5 - Submitted on 10 October 2011 - Consolidated version - Emily Taylor Thanks, Very best regards Alice From: Emily Taylor <emily@emilytaylor.eu<mailto:emily@emilytaylor.eu>> Date: Mon, 10 Oct 2011 07:37:00 -0700 To: Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>> Cc: "rt4-whois@icann.org<mailto:rt4-whois@icann.org>" <rt4-whois@icann.org<mailto:rt4-whois@icann.org>> Subject: Updated draft report Hi Alice I've been working through my action points from the last meeting. As agreed, I have reviewed the consolidated report that you pulled together. I think that the structure is right, and as anticipated, it has revealed a number of areas of duplication. In general, the report is now over 100 pages long, even without significant elements of the content (ie the consumer study, and an expanded policy implementation section). Therefore, once we have nailed the recommendations in Dakar, our next challenge will be to sweep through the text, tighten up the language and reduce the length. An action for the whole team is to look through the recommendations again. They are now all in one place, and they do ramble on a bit, given that they are taken from multiple sources. Before arriving in Dakar, have a good sense of where you stand on all of them, and what's missing. I tried to add some overarching stuff up top - ie how are we going to measure the organisation's progress (and I'm v. mindful of James' comments about the ATRT's experience in this regard), and what do we expect from ICANN in response to the report, and when? I have amended the Implementation/Compliance chapter in a way that i hope reflects our discussions in MdR. Please would you upload the amended version of the consolidated document to the private Wiki, and then notify the team. Thanks Emily -- [http://www.etlaw.co.uk/images/stories/etlaw/etclogo250x60.gif] 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 • m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily@emilytaylor.eu<mailto:emily@emilytaylor.eu> www.etlaw.co.uk<http://www.etlaw.co.uk> Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 730471. VAT No. 114487713.