Hi, I have updated based on today's discussion during the incomplete second reading. * Split Recommendation 7 into a & b to cover both Contracted parties' specific issues and the more general community issues. I understand that 7a may be too strong for some, but the sentiments expressed by some contracted parties were rather strong. this may be an issue that is appropriate for raising with the full group as part of their first reading. At this point I am concerned about weakening Recommendation 7a without some indications by the contracted parties among the group. * Replace Recommendation 8 with suggested text by Patrick * Replaced 2 instances of relevant with appropriate. doc at: <https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vH5su7SDGE0i_rTstbYJ7tIaOFuRnV4dfqpwMTPo...> (pdf attached) As always, comments and suggested edits welcome. We have one more meeting in which to complete a second reading if we want to have something to deliver to J'oburg. I am sure we will have quite a few more bite at this apple, so I am hoping that we can find a first annealing point for the draft. avri --- This email has been checked for viruses by Avast antivirus software. https://www.avast.com/antivirus