Thanks you Stephanie and the others that commented on the Skype channel, please find the updated version attached. Best, Niels Niels ten Oever Head of Digital Article 19 www.article19.org PGP fingerprint 8D9F C567 BEE4 A431 56C4 678B 08B5 A0F2 636D 68E9 On 06/21/2015 01:33 PM, Stephanie Perrin wrote:
Since it is PDFed, I cannot edit. Here are my Comments: 1. ON the title page it would be great if you could identify yourself as NCSG. 2. The fine print is way, way too small. The ownership/authorship of those reports must be more prominent, and at least legible. Title or topic of report in a couple of words would be helpful, particularly to non-english speakers 5. Get rid of the blank space, put an apostrophe in ICANN's Since we will be referring to the Ruggies principles, it might be good to add that to this slide (bullet one) again, to help folks follow the discussion better. 6. I am a little worried that this last slide looks too ambitious.....but if the group feels our community is ready for it, damn the torpedoes. IMHO, we are not ready yet.... Thanks Niels for the opportunity to comment! Stephanie On 2015-06-21 11:41, Niels ten Oever wrote:
Hi all,
I've been asked to give an overview of our CCWP work at the GAC WG and at several constituencies, for this I made a draft presentation. Please find it attached. Looking forward to hear what you think.
The presentations should take a maximum of 15 minutes, including Q&A, so I'd like to keep it short. Let me know if you thing something is missing or should be reformulated.
I'll also work on a presentation of the report for Wednesdays session, I will send that to you when it's ready for comments.
Looking forward to hear from you.
Best,
Niels
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