March 27, 2014
3:29 a.m.
I like the structure and tone, but wonder if 6) could be worded a little more assertively, and that some of the other asides might be worth capturing also. I have worked a rough redraft attached, and wonder if this might be smoothed for style and language and incorporated into the statement. Cheers Keith On 27/03/2014 1:30 p.m., Byron Holland wrote:
Dear Councillors,
Attached is a soft copy of the draft text I handed out yesterday. It is my intention to make this statement at the open session later today.
As noted yesterday, if you have any suggestions, please advise my noon today.
All the best,
Byron