Re: [CSC-EffectivenessRT] [Ext] RE: Straw man presentation
Dear Phillippe, Martin, all, Thank you for the comments received to date. Included updated version, which also includes comments and suggestion from Trang. There is one major point that I want to draw to your attention with respect to the inclusion of the table of Measures. The table refers to language in the charter, in particular IFO. However, as this effectiveness review is about the current situation, and for clarity, it is suggested to replace IFO with PTI or ICANN & PTI where appropriate. See Slide 5,6, and 7. The suggested changes are: Slide 5 – Second row, “IANA Functions Operator” should be changed to “PTI” for clarity: Slide 5 – Third row, “IANA Functions Operator” should be changed to “PTI and ICANN” to more accurately reflect the RAPs Slide 7 – Second row, “IFO” should be changed to “PTI and ICANN” for clarity Slide 7 – Third row, “IFO” should change to “PTI and ICANN” for clarity and for consistency with the SLA change process being drafted. Slide 7 row 1 , the requirement to meet annually is not in charter, only a requirement for “as needs demand”? Also, replacing “IFO” with “ICANN and PTI.” Please advise Kind regards, Bart From: "philippe.fouquart@orange.com" <philippe.fouquart@orange.com> Date: Tuesday 16 October 2018 at 17:53 To: Bart Boswinkel <bart.boswinkel@icann.org>, "CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org" <CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org> Cc: Amy Creamer <amy.creamer@icann.org>, Trang Nguyen <trang.nguyen@icann.org> Subject: [Ext] RE: Straw man presentation Bart, Thanks for this. I think that’s good, noted a typo on slide two bullet point two (“without”?) there’s probably a word missing there, and a couple of others: Slide 3: “taks” and Slide 9 “Prepratory” Regards, Philippe From: CSC-EffectivenessRT [mailto:csc-effectivenessrt-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Bart Boswinkel Sent: Friday, October 12, 2018 1:41 PM To: CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org Cc: Amy Creamer; Trang Nguyen Subject: [CSC-EffectivenessRT] Straw man presentation Dear all, Please find included the intitial draft for the RT presentations in Barcelona. I have drafted it on the basis of Phillipe’s example, the template document and using latest version of Debbie’s document. Please note that: CSC has appointed Elain Pruis as its liaison and PTI has appointed Kim Davies as its liaison. We are awaiting appointment of the ICANN Org liaison. For the time being I have included Trang and Amy Creamer in cc. Kind regards, Bart _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you.
Thanks Bart. I would agree that we need to align the terminology with the current situation, so I support the changes you suggest. Not quite sure about “Slide 7 – Third row”, seems to me it may be PTI only but happy to be corrected. Regards, Philippe From: Bart Boswinkel [mailto:bart.boswinkel@icann.org] Sent: Tuesday, October 16, 2018 6:17 PM To: FOUQUART Philippe IMT/OLN; CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org Cc: Samantha Eisner; Naela Sarras Subject: Re: [Ext] RE: Straw man presentation Dear Phillippe, Martin, all, Thank you for the comments received to date. Included updated version, which also includes comments and suggestion from Trang. There is one major point that I want to draw to your attention with respect to the inclusion of the table of Measures. The table refers to language in the charter, in particular IFO. However, as this effectiveness review is about the current situation, and for clarity, it is suggested to replace IFO with PTI or ICANN & PTI where appropriate. See Slide 5,6, and 7. The suggested changes are: Slide 5 – Second row, “IANA Functions Operator” should be changed to “PTI” for clarity: Slide 5 – Third row, “IANA Functions Operator” should be changed to “PTI and ICANN” to more accurately reflect the RAPs Slide 7 – Second row, “IFO” should be changed to “PTI and ICANN” for clarity Slide 7 – Third row, “IFO” should change to “PTI and ICANN” for clarity and for consistency with the SLA change process being drafted. Slide 7 row 1 , the requirement to meet annually is not in charter, only a requirement for “as needs demand”? Also, replacing “IFO” with “ICANN and PTI.” Please advise Kind regards, Bart From: "philippe.fouquart@orange.com" <philippe.fouquart@orange.com> Date: Tuesday 16 October 2018 at 17:53 To: Bart Boswinkel <bart.boswinkel@icann.org>, "CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org" <CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org> Cc: Amy Creamer <amy.creamer@icann.org>, Trang Nguyen <trang.nguyen@icann.org> Subject: [Ext] RE: Straw man presentation Bart, Thanks for this. I think that’s good, noted a typo on slide two bullet point two (“without”?) there’s probably a word missing there, and a couple of others: Slide 3: “taks” and Slide 9 “Prepratory” Regards, Philippe From: CSC-EffectivenessRT [mailto:csc-effectivenessrt-bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Bart Boswinkel Sent: Friday, October 12, 2018 1:41 PM To: CSC-effectivenessrt@icann.org Cc: Amy Creamer; Trang Nguyen Subject: [CSC-EffectivenessRT] Straw man presentation Dear all, Please find included the intitial draft for the RT presentations in Barcelona. I have drafted it on the basis of Phillipe’s example, the template document and using latest version of Debbie’s document. Please note that: CSC has appointed Elain Pruis as its liaison and PTI has appointed Kim Davies as its liaison. We are awaiting appointment of the ICANN Org liaison. For the time being I have included Trang and Amy Creamer in cc. Kind regards, Bart _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you.
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