Hi Bart Some changes in the attached. Perhaps the most important is that I’ve removed the RySG from the adoption requirement as the Charter only requires the ccNSO and GNSO to ratify any changes. That being said, Keith and I will make sure that we run the proposed changes by the RySG to make sure there are no objections and we can feed this into the GNSO Council decision making process. Thanks Donna From: Bart Boswinkel [mailto:bart.boswinkel@icann.org] Sent: Monday, April 09, 2018 4:08 AM To: Austin, Donna <Donna.Austin@team.neustar> Cc: CSC-review@icann.org Subject: Re: [Ext] Re: [EXTERNAL] [CSC-Review] Final version Initial report Donna, All, Please find included the WORD version of the Initial Report. This version is updated to take in all suggestions Donna made ( see below). In addition please find included the language for posting and seeking feed-back from the broader community. As you will see I will ask to open the public comment 10 April, and run it until Friday 1 June, and have the staff summary available at or around 8 June 2018. Unless ther are major hick-ups, this would allow you to submit the final report at or around 15 June 2018, in time for adoption at the Panama meeting. Please note you are scheduled for the upcoming CSC call ( Monday 16 April, 20.00 UTC). Kind regards, Bart Follow @ccNSO on Twitter: https://twitter.com/ccNSO Follow the ccNSO on Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/ccnso/ http://ccnso.icann.org<http://ccnso.icann.org/> -- From: "Austin, Donna" <Donna.Austin@team.neustar<mailto:Donna.Austin@team.neustar>> Date: Monday 9 April 2018 at 00:35 To: Bart Boswinkel <bart.boswinkel@icann.org<mailto:bart.boswinkel@icann.org>> Cc: "CSC-review@icann.org<mailto:CSC-review@icann.org>" <CSC-review@icann.org<mailto:CSC-review@icann.org>> Subject: [Ext] Re: [EXTERNAL] [CSC-Review] Final version Initial report Hi Bart This looks great, thank you. I found a couple of minor things and will note them here as the word doc was only the report and nothing else. Executive Summary Need an extra line between paras 5 and 6 Under 4.3.2 Para 4, second sentence: limited mandate HAS made it ... Para 7, need a period between ... IANA Functions Operator and The Proposed Amended Charter Scope of Responsibilities Para 6, after Remedial Action Procedures please put (RAP). And that’s all I have. I would like to see the language for the posting page before it goes up if that’s possible. Thanks again Bart Donna Sent from my iPhone On Apr 6, 2018, at 9:51 AM, Bart Boswinkel <bart.boswinkel@icann.org<mailto:bart.boswinkel@icann.org>> wrote: Dear all, Please find included the (draft) final version of the initial report. If no comments by Monday COB CET I will use this version for publication. Unfortunately the PDF version does not show the deleted sections. Finally I noticed that the following sentence was still included in the version Donna circulated under the review section: The CSC or the IANA Functions Operator can request a review or change to service levels. Any proposed changes to service levels as a result of the review must be agreed to by the ccNSO and GNSO. I deleted it as it superfluous given the new language under scope of responsibilities. Kind regards, Bart <Initial Report CSC Charter Review Team.pdf> <Initial Report CSC Charter Review Team.docx> _______________________________________________ CSC-Review mailing list CSC-Review@icann.org<mailto:CSC-Review@icann.org> https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/csc-review