Thank you Lynn and Milton for explaining words that would have been too tough for me to comprehend. I support blog post. Thank you Alissa for great job. Mary Uduma Sent from my BlackBerry wireless device from MTN -----Original Message----- From: Milton L Mueller <mueller@syr.edu> Sender: internal-cg-bounces@icann.org Date: Mon, 19 Jan 2015 16:13:51 To: 'Lynn St.Amour'<Lynn@lstamour.org>; 'Alissa Cooper'<alissa@cooperw.in> Cc: 'ICG'<internal-cg@icann.org> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Blog post Blog looks fine to me. I would however advise you to find another adjective than "fulsome" to describe the debate. The primary meaning of this term is "extravagant, excessive, overdone," etc. We wouldn't want to say that about the IANA transition debate, now would we?
-----Original Message----- From: internal-cg-bounces@icann.org [mailto:internal-cg- bounces@icann.org] On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour Sent: Monday, January 19, 2015 9:06 AM To: Alissa Cooper Cc: ICG Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Blog post
Hi Alissa,
very good article. My comments were so few that I simply included them here and did not update the document itself. They are of course only suggestions as this is your blog...
- 1st para - suggest replacing "community consensus" with "the consensus of their communities" to make it even more clear that these processes live in the respective communities.
- 5th para. - nit. for completeness: add NTIA to Larry's title.
- 3rd para. from the end - current sentence reads: "Thus, the assembly and finalization process has many built-in checks to ensure that the final plan is of the highest quality, addresses feedback from anyone who chooses to provide it, and represents community consensus." Suggest deleting: "from anyone who chooses to provide it" as this could be confusing (or over inviting)
- Penultimate para. - consider replacing "askance" with "with surprise" -- surely these types of M/S processes are no longer so foreign, even if not universally applauded :-).
Again, the blog is very good.
Thanks much for doing this.
Lynn
On Jan 16, 2015, at 12:49 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
Last week we had some mailing list discussion about a blog post I could write to provide an update about timing, next steps, and our perspective of the process to date. Attached and in Dropbox <https://www.dropbox.com/home/CoordinationGroup/January%202 015%20blog%20post> is a draft. Please send feedback to the list. It would be great to get this posted early next week.
Given the blog format, I took a few liberties with the language and tone - there is a little (attempted) humor in there.
Alissa
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