Hi Alissa, very good article. My comments were so few that I simply included them here and did not update the document itself. They are of course only suggestions as this is your blog... - 1st para - suggest replacing "community consensus" with "the consensus of their communities" to make it even more clear that these processes live in the respective communities. - 5th para. - nit. for completeness: add NTIA to Larry's title. - 3rd para. from the end - current sentence reads: "Thus, the assembly and finalization process has many built-in checks to ensure that the final plan is of the highest quality, addresses feedback from anyone who chooses to provide it, and represents community consensus." Suggest deleting: "from anyone who chooses to provide it" as this could be confusing (or over inviting) - Penultimate para. - consider replacing "askance" with "with surprise" -- surely these types of M/S processes are no longer so foreign, even if not universally applauded :-). Again, the blog is very good. Thanks much for doing this. Lynn On Jan 16, 2015, at 12:49 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
Last week we had some mailing list discussion about a blog post I could write to provide an update about timing, next steps, and our perspective of the process to date. Attached and in Dropbox <https://www.dropbox.com/home/CoordinationGroup/January%202015%20blog%20post> is a draft. Please send feedback to the list. It would be great to get this posted early next week.
Given the blog format, I took a few liberties with the language and tone — there is a little (attempted) humor in there.
Alissa
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