* page 3: typo in "Appendicies" => "Appendices" Fixed. * page 4: trailing comma at last bullet point Fixed. * page 4: agree with Dennis, maybe change "binding" to "authoritative"? "normative"? * page 6: it's not just level 4, but also the ones above (below?), maybe change this to: "... those on levels 1 - 4 on the ..." Fixed. * page 7: "..., they but can be found ..." sounds strange to me; unless the native speakers object, I'd change it to "..., but they can be found ..." Agree. Fixed. * page 10: Agree with Dennis, please rephrase as we already did include characters not in MSR, thereby creating a new version of MSR. You are focusing on our process. In our proposal, which is what the reader reads, we do not include any code point outside of MSR at the date of the proposal. * page 12: Instead of 'Sharp S and "s"' I guess it should be 'Sharp S and "ss"' Fixed. * page 13: "The appendix contain" -> "The appendix contains" (+ s). Fixed. * page 13: I would remove the second "considered to be", because it's already stated before that they are "considered to have". So, just write 'they are considered to have enough similarity to be "visually confusable".' Already updated. I hope the new version is good. Thanks for comments. I will send the updated presentation when I have processed all comments. Mats -- --- Mats Dufberg mats.dufberg@internetstiftelsen.se Technical Expert Internetstiftelsen (The Swedish Internet Foundation) Mobile: +46 73 065 3899 https://internetstiftelsen.se/ -----Original Message----- From: Michael Bauland <Michael.Bauland@knipp.de> Date: Tuesday, 21 September 2021 at 08:36 To: Mats Dufberg <mats.dufberg@internetstiftelsen.se> Cc: ICANN Latin GP <latingp@icann.org> Subject: Re: [Latingp] ICANN72 Prep Week - RZ-LGR Update Hi Mats, thank you very much for your work. Apart from the items already mentioned by Dennis and Bill, I found the following worth mentioning: * page 3: typo in "Appendicies" => "Appendices" * page 4: trailing comma at last bullet point * page 4: agree with Dennis, maybe change "binding" to "authoritative"? * page 6: it's not just level 4, but also the ones above (below?), maybe change this to: "... those on levels 1 - 4 on the ..." * page 7: "..., they but can be found ..." sounds strange to me; unless the native speakers object, I'd change it to "..., but they can be found ..." * page 10: Agree with Dennis, please rephrase as we already did include characters not in MSR, thereby creating a new version of MSR. * page 12: Instead of 'Sharp S and "s"' I guess it should be 'Sharp S and "ss"' * page 13: "The appendix contain" -> "The appendix contains" (+ s). * page 13: I would remove the second "considered to be", because it's already stated before that they are "considered to have". So, just write 'they are considered to have enough similarity to be "visually confusable".' Cheers, Michael -- ____________________________________________________________________ | | | knipp | Knipp Medien und Kommunikation GmbH ------- Technologiepark Martin-Schmeisser-Weg 9 44227 Dortmund Germany Dipl.-Informatiker Fon: +49 231 9703-0 Fax: +49 231 9703-200 Dr. Michael Bauland SIP: Michael.Bauland@knipp.de Software Development E-mail: Michael.Bauland@knipp.de Register Court: Amtsgericht Dortmund, HRB 13728 Chief Executive Officers: Dietmar Knipp, Elmar Knipp