Here are my comments, for what they are worth: Page 3, Footnote: Why would we WANT to move the onus of this from ICANN to the NARALO. Its not that I am necessarily opposed to this, I'm just wondering. Page 3, Line 29 - Change the period to a semi-colon. Page 5, Line 30 - Ending date of the agreement - I had thought that Nick (or somebody) suggested that we don't need that line as either party can cancel within 120 days. Its redundant. And that's it. Darlene Sitting in Newark airport as didn't make connection yesterday evening Air Canada is actually starting to look good compared to Continental (and that's BAAAAAAD) Should arrive San Juan at 11:05 ________________________________ From: na-discuss-bounces@atlarge-lists.icann.org on behalf of Bret Fausett Sent: Fri 6/22/2007 7:43 PM To: NA Discuss Subject: [NA-Discuss] Chair's Draft of MOU (Action Item) Dear Colleagues, After reviewing the wiki updates over the last few weeks (Thanks, Darlene!) and the comments both on the list and on our two conference calls, I've tried to distill the comments into the attached "Chair's Draft." The document is in PDF format, converted from a Word document, and has line numbers next to all of the text. I personally find it helpful to have final discussions around words in documents when we can reference page and line numbers from a fixed common draft. I would ask you each to review the draft and, when you have additions, deletions or revisions, reference the language you're addressing by its page and line number. For example, "Can we change the word 'shall' on Page 2, line 24 to 'will'...." Nick, can you arrange to have copies of this printed for everyone who will be in San Juan? Many thanks everyone. Bret