Executive Summary - with new Findings and Recommendations Text
Hi All, I sat down with three screens open and tried to work my way through the Executive Summary (as promised in our meeting Wed). I referenced our original report, slides from the Public Forum, texts that Alice has finalized, and Comment Summary that Alice prepared. In addition to a few edits to the text to remove a few "rough edges," I tried to cut and paste all the new texts for Findings and Recommendations. No promises, but I did the best I could :-)! Overall, I think this reads very well. I like how the findings and recommendations flow... and I think our work shows! /*If there are some quick edits over the weekend, I may put them in, but otherwise, I pass the pen to Alice, and ask her to post this with our other new sections for review and comment. */ Have a good weekend, Kathy
Hi Kathy Thank you for bringing this work forward. Good, minimalist work on the Exec summary, and I like what you've done on the studies, although personally I liked the previous language. I would be in favour of reverting to the bold statement about the system being broken and needing fixing. It was picked up in many of the articles about the draft report, and it now reads as if we've changed our mind about this, and it's a bit too watered down. Re-reading the situation on IDNs makes me believe strongly that we need to convey in simple terms a sense of *urgency.* * * It would be great- and easier to see what's happening, if the agreed findings and recommendations could be accepted (ie no longer in tracked changes) so that we can see clearly what is new. Alice - could you do that please? Also, Alice, for completeness we need to include the findings and recommendations from the new Compliance Chapter that I sent around yesterday - please have that marked up as people have not yet considered it. Finally, Kathy you mentioned that the WDRP recommendation has now been replaced by the new compliance recommendations. Actually, we decided in Costa Rica to keep the WDRP recommendation but to move it into data accuracy, where it fits more logically. Alice - could you do that please. Keep the text as it is, not marked up, but just put a comment in to highlight that it's been moved. Thanks again, Kathy, good work. Emily On 27 April 2012 22:53, Kathy Kleiman <kathy@kathykleiman.com> wrote:
Hi All, I sat down with three screens open and tried to work my way through the Executive Summary (as promised in our meeting Wed). I referenced our original report, slides from the Public Forum, texts that Alice has finalized, and Comment Summary that Alice prepared. In addition to a few edits to the text to remove a few "rough edges," I tried to cut and paste all the new texts for Findings and Recommendations. No promises, but I did the best I could :-)!
Overall, I think this reads very well. I like how the findings and recommendations flow... and I think our work shows! *If there are some quick edits over the weekend, I may put them in, but otherwise, I pass the pen to Alice, and ask her to post this with our other new sections for review and comment. *
Have a good weekend, Kathy
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