For Review: SSR2 Final Report
Dear SSR2 Review Team members, For your review by 17:00 UTC on Friday 22 January: Attached, please find the final report in the template. This version incorporates edits from the comms proofing. You can see the changes in the redline version attached. Please let me know if you see anything that hasn’t translated to the template properly, or anything amiss in the proofing. After the Friday deadline I will work with Russ to get the report submitted to the Board. Thanks in advance for taking the time to review this final, proofed version. FYI – the final report will be translated into the 5 UN languages. I’ll share these with the team once they are available. Best, Jennifer -- Jennifer Bryce Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) Skype: jennifer.bryce.icann Email: jennifer.bryce@icann.org
I reviewed the redlines. Something is wrong with the wording starting on page 52 for two or three pages. In the attachment, I offer corrections. I also have two questions: 1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? 2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? Russ
On Jan 20, 2021, at 2:46 PM, Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org> wrote:
Dear SSR2 Review Team members,
For your review by 17:00 UTC on Friday 22 January:
Attached, please find the final report in the template. This version incorporates edits from the comms proofing. You can see the changes in the redline version attached. Please let me know if you see anything that hasn’t translated to the template properly, or anything amiss in the proofing.
After the Friday deadline I will work with Russ to get the report submitted to the Board. Thanks in advance for taking the time to review this final, proofed version.
FYI – the final report will be translated into the 5 UN languages. I’ll share these with the team once they are available.
Best, Jennifer -- Jennifer Bryce Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
Hi Russ, Thanks for the review and revised wording. I’ll incorporate this adjustment unless other RT members comment. Regarding your questions: 1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? – Comms pointed me to this page, which is the usage they are following: https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-04-02-en 2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? See p19 for how it looks in PDF format. Best, Jennifer -- Jennifer Bryce Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) Skype: jennifer.bryce.icann Email: jennifer.bryce@icann.org From: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Date: Wednesday, 20 January 2021 at 12:27 To: Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org> Cc: ICANN SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org> Subject: [Ext] Re: [Ssr2-review] For Review: SSR2 Final Report I reviewed the redlines. Something is wrong with the wording starting on page 52 for two or three pages. In the attachment, I offer corrections. I also have two questions: 1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? 2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? Russ On Jan 20, 2021, at 2:46 PM, Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org<mailto:jennifer.bryce@icann.org>> wrote: Dear SSR2 Review Team members, For your review by 17:00 UTC on Friday 22 January: Attached, please find the final report in the template. This version incorporates edits from the comms proofing. You can see the changes in the redline version attached. Please let me know if you see anything that hasn’t translated to the template properly, or anything amiss in the proofing. After the Friday deadline I will work with Russ to get the report submitted to the Board. Thanks in advance for taking the time to review this final, proofed version. FYI – the final report will be translated into the 5 UN languages. I’ll share these with the team once they are available. Best, Jennifer -- Jennifer Bryce Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
Jennifer:
Thanks for the review and revised wording. I’ll incorporate this adjustment unless other RT members comment. Regarding your questions:
1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? – Comms pointed me to this page, which is the usage they are following:https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-04-02-en <https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-04-02-en>
Okay. That is clear enough.
2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? See p19 for how it looks in PDF format.
Okay. That works, just barely making it. Russ
Hi Russ, Thanks for confirming. One other minor edit is included in the redline attached, as flagged by Heather – the SSR2 recommendations summary table (p7) didn’t previously have a #, so it’s now labelled ‘table 1’. The SSR1 recommendations summary, previously table 1, is now table 2. Best, Jennifer -- Jennifer Bryce Project Manager, Review Support and Accountability Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) Skype: jennifer.bryce.icann Email: jennifer.bryce@icann.org From: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Date: Thursday, 21 January 2021 at 07:15 To: Jennifer Bryce <jennifer.bryce@icann.org> Cc: ICANN SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org> Subject: Re: [Ext] Re: [Ssr2-review] For Review: SSR2 Final Report Jennifer: Thanks for the review and revised wording. I’ll incorporate this adjustment unless other RT members comment. Regarding your questions: 1) Regarding "Emergency Back-end Registry Operator (EBERO)", should it be Back-End to match the capitalization in the acronym? – Comms pointed me to this page, which is the usage they are following:https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-04-02-en [icann.org]<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https:/www.icann.org/resources/pages/ebero-2013-...> Okay. That is clear enough. 2) Will Table 1 be scaled down to fit the page width? See p19 for how it looks in PDF format. Okay. That works, just barely making it. Russ
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