In response to Kavouss’ formatting request, I have attached a redline showing the proposed changes from the existing Bylaws provisions. Please note that the texts are not organized in the way, so to make the comparison meaningful, I had to re-order the text to insure that the proper language was being compared. I apologize if that is unsatisfactory Kavouss, it’s the best I can offer. J. Beckwith Burr Neustar, Inc. / Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932 Mobile: +1.202.352.6367 / becky.burr@neustar.biz<mailto:becky.burr@neustar.biz> / www.neustar.biz From: Kavouss Arasteh <kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com<mailto:kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com>> Date: Tuesday, September 1, 2015 at 4:38 PM To: Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>> Cc: Accountability Community <accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org>> Subject: Re: [CCWG-ACCT] Final version - chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values Dear All, I have not checked the doc. because it is not checkable. Standard procedure is that the initial texts are placed in one column and the amendemnets in the second column BUT WITH REVISION MARKS and NOT AS CLEAN TEXT SORRY IT IS NOT WORKABLE TO CHECK WORD BY WORD AND LIONE BY LINE REGARDS Kavouss 2015-09-01 15:45 GMT+02:00 Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>>: Dear all, Please find attached the final version of the synopsis Becky prepared. The document can also be found on your second draft proposal wiki page at https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_pages_viewpage.action-3FpageId-3D53783460&d=AwMFaQ&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=62cJFOifzm6X_GRlaq8Mo8TjDmrxdYahOP8WDDkMr4k&m=0F-J4fpf-Z2kInCQkNKuVwROn4MhE-qiP9KBdAtUAtA&s=kGRfEszyZWyrFFpIyt3_pARqOSFUgYIwV2_Llzdfu4c&e=> We will have a link to the chart added to the public comment period box - https://www.icann.org/public-comments/ccwg-accountability-draft-proposal-2015-05-04-en<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.icann.org_public-2Dcomments_ccwg-2Daccountability-2Ddraft-2Dproposal-2D2015-2D05-2D04-2Den&d=AwMFaQ&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=62cJFOifzm6X_GRlaq8Mo8TjDmrxdYahOP8WDDkMr4k&m=0F-J4fpf-Z2kInCQkNKuVwROn4MhE-qiP9KBdAtUAtA&s=tdEQl7sGEdhsLvxJ32NEi60nj8U9sJa-uSMlcoQZVrg&e=>. Thanks Best Alice From: "Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch<mailto:Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>" <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch<mailto:Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>> Date: Wednesday, August 26, 2015 5:02 PM To: "Becky.Burr@neustar.biz<mailto:Becky.Burr@neustar.biz>" <Becky.Burr@neustar.biz<mailto:Becky.Burr@neustar.biz>>, Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>>, "accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org>" <accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org>> Subject: AW: AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values Dear Beck, many thanks for your prompt and responsive answer. I feel many will benefit from this added explanations. Regards Jorge Von: Burr, Becky [mailto:Becky.Burr@neustar.biz] Gesendet: Mittwoch, 26. August 2015 15:59 An: Cancio Jorge BAKOM <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch<mailto:Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>>; alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>; accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org> Betreff: Re: AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values Dear Jorge, I will attempt to insert an explanatory column this morning. Becky J. Beckwith Burr Neustar, Inc. / Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932<tel:%2B%201.202.533.2932> Mobile: +1.202.352.6367<tel:%2B1.202.352.6367> / becky.burr@neustar.biz<mailto:becky.burr@neustar.biz> / www.neustar.biz<http://www.neustar.biz> From: "Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch<mailto:Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>" <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch<mailto:Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>> Date: Wednesday, August 26, 2015 at 1:43 AM To: Becky Burr <becky.burr@neustar.biz<mailto:becky.burr@neustar.biz>>, "alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>" <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>>, Accountability Community <accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org>> Subject: AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values Dear Becky, Thank you very much for this very useful comparison. I wonder whether a third column with an objective impact assessment of the changes would be available, in order to better understand what each and every change intends to achieve specifically and what impact this would have on current ICANN activities and operations. If this would to be done I would recommend that the explanation is inserted directly into the column and that we refrain from just inserting references to sections in the report as this makes the reading and understanding of the changes much more difficult. In addition to the foregoing, perhaps it would be useful to extend this comparison to any other specific Bylaw changes proposed in the Report, in order to benefit from a complete picture of what is being proposed at this level in one single document. Best regards, Jorge Cancio Von:accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org> [mailto:accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org<mailto:-bounces@icann.org>] Im Auftrag von Burr, Becky Gesendet: Dienstag, 25. August 2015 22:31 An: Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>>; accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org> Betreff: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values I’ve put together a chart with the requested comparison. Hope it helps. Alice, I assume someone will post as appropriate Thanks, Becky J. Beckwith Burr Neustar, Inc. / Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932<tel:%2B%201.202.533.2932> Mobile: +1.202.352.6367<tel:%2B1.202.352.6367> / becky.burr@neustar.biz<mailto:becky.burr@neustar.biz> / www.neustar.biz<http://www.neustar.biz> From: Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org>> Date: Monday, August 24, 2015 at 5:04 PM To: Accountability Community <accountability-cross-community@icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org>> Subject: [CCWG-ACCT] Call with advisors Dear all, This is to inform you that as part of your outreach and public comment process, a call will be held on Monday, 31 August - 13:00-14:00 UTC to collect CCWG-Accountability Advisors' input on the Second Draft Proposal. May we also take this opportunity to remind you that your third webinar is scheduled for tomorrow – Tuesday, 25 August – 18:00-20:00 UTC – see https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-2015-08-17-en<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.icann.org_news_announcement-2D2015-2D08-2D17-2Den&d=AwMFAw&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=62cJFOifzm6X_GRlaq8Mo8TjDmrxdYahOP8WDDkMr4k&m=BNS6-fw3KiCGmOQYj256ItxJ0SBM0tdpByV98zLIN6c&s=K8FtNNpGHlaPf7ETYlJuJgAQePUzQkTolyXPGDRrr0I&e=> for details. Webinar Q&As on your second draft proposal are compiled on a wiki page at: https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=54695403<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_pages_viewpage.action-3FpageId-3D54695403&d=AwMFAw&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=62cJFOifzm6X_GRlaq8Mo8TjDmrxdYahOP8WDDkMr4k&m=BNS6-fw3KiCGmOQYj256ItxJ0SBM0tdpByV98zLIN6c&s=Kz0jkM7qEYKZq1RnxhMHR3_B-Nzuy6kOCTetvVBKq38&e=> Thank you, Kind regards Alice _______________________________________________ Accountability-Cross-Community mailing list Accountability-Cross-Community@icann.org<mailto:Accountability-Cross-Community@icann.org> https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/accountability-cross-community<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__mm.icann.org_mailman_listinfo_accountability-2Dcross-2Dcommunity&d=AwMFaQ&c=MOptNlVtIETeDALC_lULrw&r=62cJFOifzm6X_GRlaq8Mo8TjDmrxdYahOP8WDDkMr4k&m=0F-J4fpf-Z2kInCQkNKuVwROn4MhE-qiP9KBdAtUAtA&s=-h-7iDkZo6qA0ZPtp2bgLR2grRQsEUDzFd-Fz_ftVKo&e=>

Dear Becky Dear Leon, Thanks to becky for her kind attention and useful revisions Regards Kavouss 2015-09-02 17:06 GMT+02:00 León Felipe Sánchez Ambía <leonfelipe@sanchez.mx> :

Dear Becky,

Thank you very much for taking the time for addressing Kavouss’ concern.

Kavouss,

I hope this helps you and others in the group.

Best regards,

León

El 02/09/2015, a las 9:49, Burr, Becky <Becky.Burr@neustar.biz> escribió:

In response to Kavouss’ formatting request, I have attached a redline showing the proposed changes from the existing Bylaws provisions. Please note that the texts are not organized in the way, so to make the comparison meaningful, I had to re-order the text to insure that the proper language was being compared. I apologize if that is unsatisfactory Kavouss, it’s the best I can offer.

J. Beckwith Burr *Neustar, Inc. /* Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932 Mobile: +1.202.352.6367 / becky.burr@neustar.biz / www.neustar.biz

From: Kavouss Arasteh <kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com> Date: Tuesday, September 1, 2015 at 4:38 PM To: Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org> Cc: Accountability Community <accountability-cross-community@icann.org> Subject: Re: [CCWG-ACCT] Final version - chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values

Dear All, I have not checked the doc. because it is not checkable. Standard procedure is that the initial texts are placed in one column and the amendemnets in the second column BUT WITH REVISION MARKS and NOT AS CLEAN TEXT SORRY IT IS NOT WORKABLE TO CHECK WORD BY WORD AND LIONE BY LINE REGARDS Kavouss

2015-09-01 15:45 GMT+02:00 Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org>:

...

Dear all, Please find attached the final version of the synopsis Becky prepared. The document can also be found on your second draft proposal wiki page at https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460 <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_pag...> We will have a link to the chart added to the public comment period box - https://www.icann.org/public-comments/ccwg-accountability-draft-proposal-201... <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.icann.org_public-2D...> . Thanks Best Alice

From: "Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch" <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch> Date: Wednesday, August 26, 2015 5:02 PM To: "Becky.Burr@neustar.biz" <Becky.Burr@neustar.biz>, Alice Jansen < alice.jansen@icann.org>, "accountability-cross-community@icann.org" < accountability-cross-community@icann.org> Subject: AW: AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values

Dear Beck,

many thanks for your prompt and responsive answer. I feel many will benefit from this added explanations.

Regards

Jorge

*Von:* Burr, Becky [mailto:Becky.Burr@neustar.biz <Becky.Burr@neustar.biz>] *Gesendet:* Mittwoch, 26. August 2015 15:59 *An:* Cancio Jorge BAKOM <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch>; alice.jansen@icann.org; accountability-cross-community@icann.org *Betreff:* Re: AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values

Dear Jorge,

I will attempt to insert an explanatory column this morning.

Becky J. Beckwith Burr *Neustar, Inc. /* Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932 Mobile: +1.202.352.6367 / becky.burr@neustar.biz / www.neustar.biz

*From: *"Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch" <Jorge.Cancio@bakom.admin.ch> *Date: *Wednesday, August 26, 2015 at 1:43 AM *To: *Becky Burr <becky.burr@neustar.biz>, "alice.jansen@icann.org" < alice.jansen@icann.org>, Accountability Community < accountability-cross-community@icann.org> *Subject: *AW: [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values

Dear Becky,

Thank you very much for this very useful comparison.

I wonder whether a third column with an objective impact assessment of the changes would be available, in order to better understand what each and every change intends to achieve specifically and what impact this would have on current ICANN activities and operations.

If this would to be done I would recommend that the explanation is inserted directly into the column and that we refrain from just inserting references to sections in the report as this makes the reading and understanding of the changes much more difficult.

In addition to the foregoing, perhaps it would be useful to extend this comparison to any other specific Bylaw changes proposed in the Report, in order to benefit from a complete picture of what is being proposed at this level in one single document.

Best regards,

Jorge Cancio

*Von:*accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org [ mailto:accountability-cross-community <accountability-cross-community> -bounces@icann.org] *Im Auftrag von *Burr, Becky *Gesendet:* Dienstag, 25. August 2015 22:31 *An:* Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org>; accountability-cross-community@icann.org *Betreff:* [CCWG-ACCT] chart comparing current Mission & Core Values with 2nd Draft Proposal Mission, Commitments & Core Values

I’ve put together a chart with the requested comparison. Hope it helps. Alice, I assume someone will post as appropriate

Thanks,

Becky

J. Beckwith Burr *Neustar, Inc. /* Deputy General Counsel and Chief Privacy Officer 1775 Pennsylvania Avenue NW, Washington, DC 20006 Office: + 1.202.533.2932 Mobile: +1.202.352.6367 / becky.burr@neustar.biz / www.neustar.biz

*From: *Alice Jansen <alice.jansen@icann.org> *Date: *Monday, August 24, 2015 at 5:04 PM *To: *Accountability Community <accountability-cross-community@icann.org> *Subject: *[CCWG-ACCT] Call with advisors

Dear all,

This is to inform you that as part of your outreach and public comment process, a call will be held on *Monday, 31 August - 13:00-14:00 UTC *to collect CCWG-Accountability Advisors' input on the Second Draft Proposal.

May we also take this opportunity to remind you that your third webinar is scheduled for tomorrow – *Tuesday, 25 August – 18:00-20:00 UTC* – see https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-2015-08-17-en <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www.icann.org_news_anno...> for details.

Webinar Q&As on your second draft proposal are compiled on a wiki page at: https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=54695403 <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_pag...>

Thank you,

Kind regards

Alice

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