Re: [Ssr2-review] Notes on Terms of Reference
Dear all, Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment. With many thanks and best wishes Laurin
Dear Team Just wanted to encourage us to include in the footer language similar to ‘As updated during Face to Face held August 22-24,2018’ or language that has an effective date of adoption by the team of the updated version. Also, we were focused on the early paragraphs and we missed updating the sections below extracted from page 6 that speak to Leadership and Co- Chairs. We could consider deleting and replacing with text that reflect the current leads and replacing the words co-chairs with the chair and vice chair language as appropriate. This is the text as is: Decisions of the SSR2-RT will be made at meetings, either face-to- face or via teleconference (teleconference or Adobe), and via the SSR2-RT’s email list, as requested by the Co-Chairs. Leadership At its meeting on March 22 2017 the SSR2-RT selected by consensus Denise Michel, Emily Taylor and Eric Osterweil as Co-Chairs. Responsibilities of the Co-Chairs include: · Remain neutral when serving as Co-Chair · Identify when speaking as an advocate · Maintain standards and focus on the aims of the Review Team as established in its Terms of Reference Drive toward delivery of key milestones according to the Work Plan Cheers Kerry-Ann
On Aug 24, 2018, at 3:36 PM, Weissinger, Laurin <laurin.weissinger@yale.edu> wrote:
Dear all,
Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment.
With many thanks and best wishes Laurin
<SSR2-TermsofReference-team comments 23-Aug-18.docx> _______________________________________________ Ssr2-review mailing list Ssr2-review@icann.org https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/ssr2-review
Hi, All. It was great to reconnect with you and meet the new members. I have included some minor edits for your consideration (including capturing suggested updates). They are in red-line text in the attached. Laurin – thanks, again, for holding the pen on this! Best, Denise From: Ssr2-review <ssr2-review-bounces@icann.org> on behalf of Kerry-Ann Barrett <kerryann.barrett@gmail.com> Date: Saturday, August 25, 2018 at 5:49 AM To: "Weissinger, Laurin" <laurin.weissinger@yale.edu> Cc: SSR2 <ssr2-review@icann.org> Subject: Re: [Ssr2-review] Notes on Terms of Reference Dear Team Just wanted to encourage us to include in the footer language similar to ‘As updated during Face to Face held August 22-24,2018’ or language that has an effective date of adoption by the team of the updated version. Also, we were focused on the early paragraphs and we missed updating the sections below extracted from page 6 that speak to Leadership and Co- Chairs. We could consider deleting and replacing with text that reflect the current leads and replacing the words co-chairs with the chair and vice chair language as appropriate. This is the text as is: Decisions of the SSR2-RT will be made at meetings, either face-to- face or via teleconference (teleconference or Adobe), and via the SSR2-RT’s email list, as requested by the Co-Chairs. Leadership At its meeting on March 22 2017 the SSR2-RT selected by consensus Denise Michel, Emily Taylor and Eric Osterweil as Co-Chairs. Responsibilities of the Co-Chairs include: • Remain neutral when serving as Co-Chair • Identify when speaking as an advocate • Maintain standards and focus on the aims of the Review Team as established in its Terms of Reference Drive toward delivery of key milestones according to the Work Plan Cheers Kerry-Ann On Aug 24, 2018, at 3:36 PM, Weissinger, Laurin <laurin.weissinger@yale.edu<mailto:laurin.weissinger@yale.edu>> wrote: Dear all, Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment. With many thanks and best wishes Laurin <SSR2-TermsofReference-team comments 23-Aug-18.docx> _______________________________________________ Ssr2-review mailing list Ssr2-review@icann.org<mailto:Ssr2-review@icann.org> https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/ssr2-review<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__mm.icann.org_mailman_listinfo_ssr2-2Dreview&d=DwMFaQ&c=5VD0RTtNlTh3ycd41b3MUw&r=MWVuq3jZIw5gwhGdDf-HWNL4CEWIsdUnt9gOgplCArM&m=k-FP-H9pMYsaawzAdJZhROTA6e6_K56bv71r_ts33ls&s=KVHizOH6zMu14rPsoqqC5MoUHBj7K6s03HkXhgNntco&e=>
Dear Laurin, I have gone through the document and agree that it is a better improvement of the previous version. It has captured all the mandate and responsibility is covered by ICANN bylaws. Only one more comments, it sound that it is missing recent leadership election during our F2F meeting in Washington DC. regards, Matogoro On Aug 24, 2018 22:37, "Weissinger, Laurin" <laurin.weissinger@yale.edu> wrote:
Dear all,
Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment.
With many thanks and best wishes Laurin
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On Fri, Aug 24, 2018 at 07:36:48PM +0000, Weissinger, Laurin wrote:
Dear all,
Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment.
With many thanks and best wishes Laurin
<pedantic> folks, wrt the citations i pleaded for on what's now page 3 of the document, i have one minor and one major comment. (1) minor: we don't need four footnotes if the definitionss are all from the same place, we can just footnote above the list after the word "definitions", which i think is cleaner. (2) major: this choice of source for these defintions is causing me some heartburn. who wrote them? when? based on what community ratification process? how would i even navigate to this URL on ICANN's web site? it appears that these definitions emerged from icann's response to SSR1's Recommendation (1) and (3), which makes it more important to be explicit about the trajectory of their development. but when i go to https://community.icann.org/display/SSR/SSR1+Review+Implementation+Home and download the pdf of slides so i can click through the links, for Recommendation (1) the "Project Status" says: Public comment was taken on a draft statement between May-Sept 2012; [https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/draft-ssr-role-remit-2012-05-17-en] it was subsequently revised in Oct 2012. [ http://toronto45.icann.org/meetings/toronto2012/presentation-draft-ssr-role-...] The updated statement (URL we currently footnote) was published on ICANNs website and incorporated in the FY 14 SSR Framework https://www.icann.org/en/about/staff/security/ssr/ssr-plan-fy14-06mar13-en.p... and is part of SSR SOP in which SSR Framework and statement is periodically reviewed and updated as needed. This statement also has been incorporated into other ICANN documentation. but i do not see where on the ICANN web site this history is explained, just in this slide deck sent to SSR2. i do not see any description of the process by which community consensus was reached. the "updated statement" is significantly different from the October 2012 revision, but there is no explanation for how ICANN got from the October 2012 version (after public comment) to the one-we-cite-that-doesn't-even-have-a-date. i would rather suggest replacement text or URL than just critique what's there now, but i do not know the history here, so it's not clear to me what to suggest. e.g., why not this one: https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/ssr-plan-fy14-06mar13-en.pdf or this one: https://www.icann.org/icann-acronyms-and-terms/en/nav/S ? really not trying to be difficult here.. k
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